Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the less of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays , the question of what the main environmental
problems
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in our time is up for debate as some see that the main issue is the low number of particular
species
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of
plants
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and
animals
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while
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others think that
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are many other important
problems
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relating to the
environment
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. In my opinion ,
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believe that we should focus on the low number of living
species
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in our time because it is really the most
sufficent
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sufficient
issue
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the
environment
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. To
further
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elaborate , one of the earth's most important factors
are
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is
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the living
species
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that provide great benefits to our world so when we
dont
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don't
have enough of them our
environment
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will surely suffer .Without
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doubt
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doubt,
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there are other
problems
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but with
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problem at
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more suffering will occur so we need to give our time and effort
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finding a solution and we have to try to save our
plants
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and
animals
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.
On the other hand
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, some people might think that there are many different
problems
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that our
environment
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is facing that are far more important .
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, they see that
species
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are not the main factor
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our
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environment
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suffering because the rise and fall of the
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number
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of
animals
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and
plants
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we have is normal and it should not be a concern .
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, pollution and deforestation just to name a few are issues that cause great harm far more than the latter .
To sum up
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,
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see that we should focus on the concerning number of living creatures we have because they are the main cause of the many
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we are facing and we cannot ignore it and deal with other issues unless we find a way to save our
plants
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and
animals
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.
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task achievement
Introduce specific examples to support your claims. For instance, discuss particular species that are endangered or extinct and their impact on the environment.
coherence cohesion
Clarify some vague phrases, such as 'really the most sufficient issue' and 'more suffering will occur.' Consider rephrasing to make your points clearer.
task achievement
You have effectively discussed both views on the topic, which demonstrates an understanding of the complexities involved.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay is logical, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystems
  • extinction
  • irreversible
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • overpopulation
  • resource depletion
  • interconnectivity
  • comprehensive approach
  • immediate health impacts
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