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the bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men and women in australia in 2007.

the bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men and women in australia in 2007.
#bar #hours #week #men #women #australia
The presented column graph compares Australian
male
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males
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 and
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females
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 in terms of their weekly working duration in 2007.
Overall
, citizens’ working duration varied from 0 to above 80
hours
.
In addition
, residents spending 30-50
hours
 per
week
 were the most prevalent in both genders. Turning into detail, with nearly 43%,
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 working between 30 and 50
hours
 per
week
 occupied the highest percentage among 5 groups, followed by a figure of exactly 30% for
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-80 category.
By contrast
, in comparison to the aforementioned sectors, that of
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-20 and over 80
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 were remarkably lower, with about 12% and 10%, respectively. Meanwhile,
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males
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 working less than 10
hours
 per
week
 accounted for only 5% of
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 population. Regarding
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female counterparts, people spending 30-50
hours
 per
week
 at work occupied 35%, ranking first among all duration groups,
whereas
 that of
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-20 sector was considerably smaller, with approximately 23%.
In addition
, there was an insignificant difference between
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-80 and 0-10
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categories
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, in which the former’s percentage of about 18% slightly edged out the latter’s, with 15%. Unlike other sectors, the rate of only a tenth revealed that
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 Australian women chose to work more than 80
hours
 per
week
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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