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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and table
illustrates
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 data about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries
during
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for
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 9
years
 . 
Overall
it is clear that
 there is
correlation
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the
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between the
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USA
 and
Australia
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Australia's
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 same
figures
 in 2004 .
To begin
with
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with,
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 the bar chart provides the
USA
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USA's
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 highest
number
 is
student
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students
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 approximately 250.in 2012 .
While
 in 2004 it can be seen the population 160 .
The
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In the
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USA
 and Australia it were equally the
figures
 very small
number
 110 .
Whereas
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 Canada both
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number
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the number
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 of students
in
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English speaking
approximately
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by approximately
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around
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50 . Moving to the table chart the
figures
 depicted
distinctive
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are distinctive
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 the
number
 is uneven in
table
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the table
a table
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 . The
USA
very
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had very
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 small numbers in two
years
while
 Australia increased
figures
 in two
years
 percentage 19 to 24%. On
one
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hand
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hand,
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 Canada rose to 7% percentage consider
this
figures
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marasures
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measures
 in 2012
On the other
hand
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 developed the
uk
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UK
 during 9
years
 for foreign students as
percentage
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a percentage
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 of
total
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13
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of 13
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% . In conclusion
overall
in contrast
figures
 in both canteries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, usa, figures, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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