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The diagram shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above, and below the surface of the Earth. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The diagram shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above, and below the surface of the Earth. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The given illustration represents the information about
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water
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the water
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 cycle, which is perceptual
water
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 circulation from the Earth to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 and vice-versa.
Overall
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, the
7 step
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7-step
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 natural cycle begins with
ocean
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the ocean
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 evaporating and ends with saline encroachment. The process commences with evaporation of surface
water
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, leading to
water
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 vapour condensation.
Subsequently
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, clouds are formed and sedimentation takes place, resulting in
a
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apply
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rain. When
water
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 drops onto the Earth, it runs over
surface
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the surface
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then
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and then
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being
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is
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 added to groundwater.
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, saline intrusion occurs and
water
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flaws
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falls
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 into
ocean
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the ocean
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 and the process begins again.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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