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The illustration below depicts the water cycle, which is the ongoing circulation of water on, above, and below the Earth's surface.

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The illustration below depicts the
water
 cycle, which is the ongoing circulation of
water
 on, above, and below the Earth's surface. The
water
 cycle involves
the
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several stages from
melting
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the melting
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 of snow to cloud formation. First of all, snow is melting and should get in surface runoff.When groundwater is got in runoff it
is went
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 through
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the imrevious
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imrevious
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impervious
previous
 layer.
Afterwards
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 it
is went
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 through
salt
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saltwater
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water
 intrusion and
get
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in
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 to ocean.
Eventually
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water
 from
ocean
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 transforms into
water
 vapor
due to
 heat from the sun.
At the
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 next stage of
a
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 process occurs when
water
vapor
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 in the atmosphere cools and changes back into liquid droplets, forming clouds.As
the
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 result,through which
water
 droplets in clouds become heavy enough to fall to the Earth in the form of rain, snow, sleet, or hail. The process is non-harmful to nature because of only natural products.So
this
 process is renewable and better than manufacturing processes
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task achievement
To achieve a better score in Task Achievement, ensure that all key phases and components of the process are described thoroughly. In this case, mentioning the specific stages such as evaporation, condensation, and precipitation in more detail can make the response more complete.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a structured response.
task achievement
You have touched on the key stages of the water cycle such as melting of snow, formation of clouds, and precipitation.

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