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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.
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Two pie charts give information about 7 different
habits
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 for British
people
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 which are books, computers, furniture, restaurants, petrol and cars from 1971 to 2001.
Overall
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 , car and food
habits
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 were significantly value factors for
people
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while
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 reading a book and computers were less preferred by the
UK
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people
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. At first glance, we can say that cars made up overweight of the total by %43 in the year 1971 ,
on the other hand
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, it narrowed to the percentage of 22 in the
UK
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 in 2001. The consumption of furniture, computers and petrol had the smallest fractions in 1997 respectively %12, %8 and %8 and they almost remained steady in 2011. In the
UK
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 , restaurant
habits
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 experienced reducing , because The British
people
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 were going to restaurants at a ratio of %14,
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 they changed their eating
habits
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 aftermath the restaurants decreased to %7 in 2011. We can observe that one of the growing proportions was food
habits
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, it was a smidgen percentage of 14 in 1971 though , it almost accounted for the total by %44 in the
UK
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 in 2001.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words habits, people, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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