The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement- making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
Two diagrams illustrate the process of
cement
production
and concrete production
. Overall
, it can be inferred that in total, there are four different stages in the production
of cement
and concrete, starting from crushing limestone and clay in cement
production
and ending with mixing the raw materials in concrete production
.
Initially
, two main ingredients in cement
production
, which are limestone and clay, are crushed until it
Correct pronoun usage
they
becomes
Correct subject-verb agreement
become
powder
in a machine called “crusher”
. The Correct article usage
a “crusher”
powder
then
mixed in the mixer to blend them Add a missing verb
is then
altogether
. Afterwards, the mixed Rephrase
together
powder
enters the rotating heater, which is shaped like a tube, with flames used to heat them in the below surface. Once it is all heated, the hot powder
is grounded in a grinder machine until it forms into
a superfine Change preposition
apply
powder
, called “cement
”. The readily-used cement
is then
packed into bags, usually made of a strong type of paper or plastic.
Subsequently
, the process of concrete production
begins. The proportion of all raw materials needed for making concrete are
50% small stones, Change the verb form
is
also
known as “gravel”, 25% sand, 15% of cement
, and 10% water. On
the final stage, all those materials are placed into a machine called Change preposition
In
“concrete
mixer” until they are all mixed well and the concrete is ready to be used.Correct article usage
a “concrete
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