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some places in the world, some people do not support the government for recycling plastic, what are the problemsa nd solutions?

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In some countries, society does not cooperate with
government
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 in recycling wasted materials like plastic bottles or newspapers. The following passage is going to discuss
about
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the causes of
this
behavior
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 by people and make some relevant solutions for it. One of the main reasons for not recycling
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waste
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wastes
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 is lack of knowledge,
Although
 these days kids and children learn about environmental issues with several ways to eliminate them,
but
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the
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adults
unfortunately
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 did not gain enough information about them, or at least the effects they have on our planet.
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, grownups do not participate in cleaning their neighborhood, city, or country
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at
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 larger
scales
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. The other ground reason for
this
 manner of humans is the access to recycling bins, even though it may
does
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not seem logical,
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in many
nations
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 there are not many recycling buckets in their hometown
due to
lack
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 of facilities in their city. In order to fix
this
 problem, all groups of society must be educated about recovering
wastes
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.
This
 could be done by showing them
multiple
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 impacts that human trash makes on our globe and the environment around it.
Furthermore
, governments can run several shows and social events with
goal
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 of increasing people’s knowledge and interest in helping, cleaning and improving the environment around us day by day.
Moreover
, with increasing the number of recycling bins in societies, governments can play an essential
rule
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 in
this
 process. In conclusion, many considerations can be taken by countries and international organizations to make the earth a cleaner place to live in by recycling trash, but humans should
also
 pay attention and understand the importance of
this
 movement by taking
actions
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 in their everyday
life
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has a good structure, but it could benefit from more clarity in explaining your ideas. Specifically, you should ensure that each point is clearly stated and elaborated upon. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
Ensure that all main points are supported with relevant, specific examples. This will strengthen your arguments and provide a more comprehensive response to the task.
coherence cohesion
While your introduction and conclusion are present and contribute positively to your essay, the conclusion can be made stronger by summarizing the main points discussed rather than making a general statement.
coherence cohesion
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your discussion effectively.
task achievement
You do a good job identifying two main reasons for the lack of cooperation in recycling efforts and proposing sensible solutions.

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