The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.
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spent by foreigners on their visit to the UK and the reasons for their visits. The values are depicted from 1980 to 2010.
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, over the years, there has been a varied increase in the
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spent by visitors from 1980 to 2010. Notably, the most amount of
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was spent right after 1995, followed by 2006. The cause of their visits
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relatively similar in 2010 as in 1980. Even though, starting with just over 7500 million pounds in 1980, these visitors spent more than 10500 million pounds in the year 2010. Over
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period the trend has seen a varied increase.
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,
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amount of
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was spent in the year 1996, with 12000 million pounds.
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, most people visited the UK as tourists in 1980 and 2010, with 44.1% and 39.1%, respectively.
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, in 1980, around 20%
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the came to the UK
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their loved ones,
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and other reasons. In 2010, work trips and travelling to see family and friends
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increased to around 25%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • expenditure
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • 30-year period
  • tourism
  • business trips
  • educational purposes
  • visiting friends or relatives
  • significant changes
  • global events
  • economic conditions
  • socio-cultural changes
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