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The pie charts below how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries

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The pie charts compare how they can treat hazardous
waste
products
 with methods in three countries
Overall
, recycling is the widely-used approach to treating dangerous
waste
 in Korea .
In contrast
to
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Sweden and UK apply different
waste
 treatment methods .
Furthermore
, the United Kingdom provides various methods for
waste
products
 . İn Korea , the most significant share of dangerous
waste
 (70%) is recycled . the second highest proportion is 22% and dangerous
waste
products
is
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 buried underground Sweden ,
on the other hand
 , prefers to bury hazardous
waste
products
 underground . There is little difference between the share of recycling and burning ,
proportion
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 of recycling is 28% whilst incineration was calculated as 20% The most popular method in
United
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 Kingdom ,like in Sweden , is burying which contributes 82% . the UK
aslo
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also
 dumps
of
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its
waste
 at sea
while
 chemical treatment is 8% . incineration was considered only 2%
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grammar
Ensure that there are no grammatical errors and that the sentences flow smoothly. For instance, 'the second highest proportion is 22% and dangerous waste products is buried underground' should be 'the second highest proportion is 22% and dangerous waste products are buried underground.'
structure
A stronger conclusion can help summarize the main findings more effectively.
task response
The essay accurately describes the proportions and methods used for waste management in each country.
coherence
The essay uses comparative language effectively to show differences between countries.

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