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The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart shows that from 7:30 to 10:30 O'clock the coffe
shop
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 has served more
pastries
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in addition
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 cooffee than the other menu, I think its beacuse in the morning people love to drink a
coffee
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 with a few
pastries
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 to get up and be more powerful. On the one hand, From 10:30 to 2:30 the
coffee
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shop
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 made a sandwiches more than
pastries
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 as long as its the afternoon period, considering it is a lunch time so the costemers wanted to eat a perfect meal.
On the other hand
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, from 2:30 to 5:30 the
coffee
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shop
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 served like the morning I think that becuse the people started to become more sleepy so they get a
coffee
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 and more
pastries
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.
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, on a night time the cooffe
shop
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 served
coffee
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 aswell but with more sanwiches, I wonder why costumers do not get a tea.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, pastries, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peak hours
  • typical weekday
  • busiest period
  • least busy period
  • sales volume
  • time intervals
  • items sold
  • employee preferences
  • observable patterns
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • dips
  • spikes
  • data analysis
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