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M. The two maps below show a small village in the west of Ireland in the year 2000 and at the present time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

M. The two maps below show a small village in the west of Ireland in the year 2000 and at the present time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate a small
village
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 in the west of Ireland in 2000 and at the present time.
Overall
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, a rural
area
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 with farmland has been changed into a more residential
area
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 with more housing and parks. The southern part of the
village
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 used to be a commercial
area
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 with a dock for fishery, which was replaced by restaurants and the dock was completely removed from the sea. The most significant changes are that the large farmland on the north-west side of the
village
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 was replaced by a park and that the dock and the markets in the southern of the
village
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 disappeared and there are currently up to four restaurants available along the street which spreads from the west to the east of the
village
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. The residential
area
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 was enlarged with additional houses on the
further
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 extended streets located in the centre of the
village
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 and those located in the north-west.
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, a car park was built
at the end
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 of the streets in the southwest.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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