The following bar graph compares the age profiles of male and female cinema goers in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females who did physical
workout
regularly in various age groups in 2010. Fix the agreement mistake
workouts
Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
men aged between 15 and 24 Linking Words
years
old and women aged between 45 and 54 Use synonyms
years
old dominated the percentage of individuals who did regular workouts in each gender.
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According to
the data, men whose Linking Words
age
ranged between 15 and 24 Fix the agreement mistake
ages
years
old were Use synonyms
the
highest category in terms of doing physical workouts, at 52.8%. Change preposition
in the
Furthermore
, Linking Words
this
was followed by the elder males aged 65 Linking Words
years
old and above and those whose ages ranged between 55 to 64 Use synonyms
years
old, at 46.7% and 45.1%, respectively. Meanwhile, men aged between 25 to 34 Use synonyms
years
old, 35 to 44 Use synonyms
years
old, and 45 to 54 Use synonyms
years
old were below 45% each.
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In contrast
, those Linking Words
age
Replace the word
aged
ranged
between 45 and 54 Verb problem
apply
years
old were the highest category for females, at 53.3% and those aged between 55 to 64 Use synonyms
years
old came as the second position at only 0.3% lower than them. Youngsters who were 35 to 44 Use synonyms
years
old, between 25 to 34 Use synonyms
years
old, and between 15 to 24 Use synonyms
years
old, Use synonyms
followed
at 52.5%, 48.9%, Add a missing verb
were followed
47.7
%, consecutively. The elders aged 65 Correct word choice
and 47.7
years
old and above were registered as the lowest rate in females, at 47.1%.Use synonyms
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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