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You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter Explain why you have moved Describe the new house Invite your friend to come and visit

#house #english #friend #visit
Dear friend, How are you?, I hope you are fine. I'm writing
this
 letter to inform you that I moved to a different
house
.
Firstly
, I changed
at
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 a new
house
 because I have some reasons. The first is that my old
house
 is bigger for me. The second reason is my which to have a
house
 near my work.
Finally
, I want to have a
house
 with
garden
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a garden
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. On
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the others
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others hands
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other hand
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, the new
house
 is beautiful. It
exists
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has
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 two rooms, one bedroom, one bathroom and
salon
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a salon
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 with
balcony
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a balcony
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. 
Moroaver
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Moreover
, I have a small garden in front of the principal door. I will
take
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 coffee every evening after work.
Finally
, I want to invite you to my new
house
 next weekend. I'm
prepararing
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preparing
my
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for my
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 birthday party. I
wish
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hope
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 you come and be my guest. I'm waiting for your response
about
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 my invitation. Bests regards Rabeb
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grammar
Ensure to proofread your letter to catch minor grammatical mistakes and awkward phrases. For example, 'I changed at a new house because I have some reasons' could be improved to 'I moved to a new house for several reasons'.
task response
Try to elaborate a bit more on each point for a more engaging narrative. For example, you could describe the convenience of living near your work or the beauty of the garden in more detail.
content selection
The letter covers all necessary points: reasons for moving, description of the new house, and an invitation.
tone
The writing tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
engagement
Including a future event (birthday party) makes the invitation personal and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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