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The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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annual
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the annual
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salaries
 of
language
-related careers in the United States
in
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apply
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(
Mexico
, Dubia, Paris, Munich, and
Toronto
) .
Overall
,
Salaries
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the Salaries
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 of people
that
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who
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 work in English are the highest in
Toronto
,
while
  English jobs'
salaries
is
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are
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 the lowest in
Mexico
. In the other
nations
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nations,
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 they have more income
in
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from
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interpreter
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interpreters
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 than
translatora
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translator
translators
 and
language
teacher
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teachers
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. Interpreter's
salaries
is
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are
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 the biggest in
Toronto
, Munich, and Dubia (about 8000 , just above 7000, and exactly 6000 respectively).
However
, in
Mexico
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Mexico,
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 it is lower than other job categories around 2000, and in Paris as
same
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the same
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 as Translator
salaries
just
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are just
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 above 60000. Translator incomes are more than
Language
teacher
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teachers
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 in Paris and Munich both around 60000,
while
 it is similar
as
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to
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language
teacher
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teachers
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 in
Toronto
 and
Mexico
 about 60000/and just under 20000 respectively.
In contrast
translators
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translators'
translator's
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salaries
less
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are less
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 than
language
teacher
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teachers
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 in Dubia about 50000 to 600000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, mexico, toronto, language, teacher with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • languages-related jobs
  • US dollars
  • five cities
  • highest income
  • lowest income
  • average income
  • significantly higher
  • second highest
  • one-fourth
  • gradual increase
  • variations
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