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In marriages today, some argue that is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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people
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the people
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 argue that
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 responsibility of both spouses to earn a
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living
 for the family. bur in my opinion
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the husband
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should
 take
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responsibility
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 the family.
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 our culture the
man
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responsible
to earn
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for earning
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the
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 living and
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 care of his family financully . and the
women
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 should take care of the house and children .
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 not have to work unless she
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desire
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 is what we have
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culture
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religion
religions
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culture
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 the
man
 always was the
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responsible
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family
.
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 the husband
sholud
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should
 afford a good living.
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the
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time
 the woman has the
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responsibility
 of the raise and
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teaching
 the kids. and aford for them
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good quality
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food and
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wath
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motherhood is
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giving
having
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child
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 your full
time
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time
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she
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 put so much effort
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 her house to make it
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peerfct
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perfect
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much
 she can . the effort
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doubled
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when
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 she
pregment
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pregnant
.
pregmancy
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pregnancy
 and child
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delivery
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constant
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great
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thing
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 that
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women
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responsbal
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responsible
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there
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for
 that the
man
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leving
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living
 for the family .
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 the coking and
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cleaning
 take
alot
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a lot
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affort
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effort
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their
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there
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 espshions that
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make
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 the wafi need to do
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both job to living .sometime the
husband
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husband's
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 income
so
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 law he cant
afoord
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afford
 the
essental
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essential
 family needs. so the
wafe
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wife
wave
 fand
her self
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herself
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forst
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first
 to work and cover
ther
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her
 low
incom
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income
 .
further
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there
 are some
man
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not
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 care to
proved
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provide
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good life. it the end
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there may
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agree
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to
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the
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women help the
man
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living
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 but as
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mention
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i
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 believe that the
man
resposbalty
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responsibility
 to
family
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his family
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 and
this
 is the coract
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aspect
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