In marriages today, some argue that is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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argue that
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responsibility of both spouses to earn a
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living
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the husband
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the family.
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our culture the
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living and
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care of his family financully . and the
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should take care of the house and children .
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the husband
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your full
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put so much effort
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her house to make it
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both job to living .sometime the
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income
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law he cant
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afford
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essential
family needs. so the
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income
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women help the
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mention
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believe that the
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responsibility
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his family
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