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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea ora waste of time?

#students #gap #year #university #travel #gain #work #idea #ora #waste #time
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A trend
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of
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gap
year
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years
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 become more and more popular because many
students
 take it before starting to go to college, travelling, or
gaining
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gain
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 work
experiences
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experience
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. Some people might wonder
is
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if is
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 it a good idea or just
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
. Personally, I think it is not wasting of
time
 at all.
Otherwise
,
students
 can
take
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benefits
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benefit
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 from it,
such
 as
know
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knowing
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 about her or himself more deeply.
Students
or
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in their teenage
life
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lives
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 are still trying to define who themselves. By taking some
time
 or in
this
case
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case,
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 is
gap
year
,
students
 will learn a lot, either hard skills or soft skills. In
gap
year
time
, they are not just sitting at home and preparing to get to
university
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the university
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 they want but
also
 doing useful activities. To illustrate,
students
 can take online courses for programming or cooking. Having said that, they will know are they have
passion
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a passion
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on
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for
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 it or not.
Besides
, they can consider
to
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whether to
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 take it as their major or not.
In other words
,
gap
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a gap
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year
 possible
them
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for them
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 to know their interest specifically.
Furthermore
,
gap
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a gap
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year
 can bring them to do anything they want that
have
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 not happened.
Due to
 they spend around eight hours at school and study again at home, they often feel
burn
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 out. In their lifetime, maybe they want to do something but not have enough
time
 for it.
For example
, they can visit their dream places. On the other sides, they can try to search job and use the money to
travelling
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travel
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. So,
gap
year
 offer
the
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amazing experiences for the
students
.
To sum up
,
gap
year
 is a totally brilliant idea. I am pretty sure, the
students
 will never regret it. But, not forget to
be mentioned
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mention
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,
the
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that the
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students
 have to maximize their
gap
year
 to be more valuable. Because there are some
students
that
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who
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 just
staying
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 at home and
doing
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do
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 nothing.
This
 we called a
totally
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total
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 waste of
time
.
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task achievement
Strengthen your arguments by including more specific examples and evidence to support your points. For instance, you could mention particular skills students might learn during their gap year or specific benefits observed from real cases.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Better use of linking words and phrases at the start of each paragraph would greatly enhance the logical flow of your essay.
overall
There are several grammatical and syntactical errors that make parts of the essay unclear. Review common grammar rules and consider running your essay through a grammar checker or seeking feedback from a mentor.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easy for the reader to follow your main arguments.
task achievement
You have addressed the prompt well, giving a balanced view on the topic before concluding with a strong personal opinion.
task achievement
You have included valid points about both personal development and potential drawbacks of not utilizing the gap year effectively.
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