The bar graph shows the annual number of rides taken on two forms of public transportation in the city of Williamsville between 2016 to 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates males and females, who received average salaries on a weekly basis and worked in various departments in the year 2020.
Overall
, it can be seen from the graph that the higher salary received by the men
in all professions in the same year. Whereas
females received more pay in professional occupations as compared to other jobs. Both men
and women
received the lowest payment
in manual labour occupations.
It is conspicuous that for men
pay was $2000 in 2020 and it was highest among all the categories in both genders. The minimum payment
received by the men
in manual labourers, where these employees received $1100 per week
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. In addition
, professionals occupation paid the highest salary by employers; it was $2000 every week
in 2020 and administrative/ clerical workers, service workers and technicians were higher than the
Correct article usage
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women
.
Probing ahead, it can be experienced in the same year girls received the maximum payment
in the professionals' category $1900 per week
. Furthermore
, the women
got lessened payment
of $850 in manual labourers jobs. Additionally
, the maximum salary per week
got by girls is $1900 in professional occupations. So in all categories, ladies received less as compared to men
. Companies showed more interest in men
than women
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