The graph below shows the percentage of people using the internet in different countries from 2000 to 2020.

The graph below shows the percentage of people using the internet in different countries from 2000 to 2020.
The line chart provides us the information about changes in the population of people who used the
internet
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Internet
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in the period from 2000 to 2020 in 3 different countries. In Mexico in 1999 there was the lowest number of people who used the internet but the percentage of
users
dramatically increased by 2009.
However
,
its
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apply
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a
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the
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lowest trend of
users
increased
by
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in
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this
graph. At the same period in
Canada
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Canada,
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the figures for
users
rocketed starting 2003 and increased 2 times by 2009. In the USA in 1999 the numbers of
users
were higher than in
Canada
.
However
, in 2009 it showed a downward trend compared with
Canada
’s line chart. Mexican
users
showed us the lowest trend compared with the USA and
Canada
that were provided to us by
this
slightly increased line chart. The USA and
Canada
are the main competitors for
the
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internet
users
among these 3 countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words users, canada with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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