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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below shows the result of how
energy
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 is used in an average Australian household
that
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results
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 in greenhouse gas
emissions
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. In terms of
energy
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 usage, the primary source is other appliances for 24% of total
energy
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 consumption, followed by water heating which was 23%, and heating and cooling for 20%. The least
energy
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 consumption is cooking and
stand by
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, making up only 5% of
energy
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 use. When considering greenhouse gas
emissions
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, it only makes a little bit of change. Heating and cooling remain the largest contributor
for
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 38% of total
emissions
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. Water heating
also
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 significantly impacts
emissions
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, responsible for 25%.
However
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, cooking and
stand by
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 still produce a smaller percentage of
emissions
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 which is 4% and 3%.
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, it seems like cooling and heating is the most
energy
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-intensive activity in Australian households for being the third
most
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apply
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largest
energy
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 that has been used, which leads to the highest
emissions
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.
In contrast
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, other appliances that consume the largest amount of
energy
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 contribute less to greenhouse gas
emissions
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. It decreases
8
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by 8
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%.
Therefore
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, we need to make improvements in reducing
emissions
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 starting from reducing the
energy
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 that we use.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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