The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts represent information about
energy
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the energy
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percentage used by
the
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household
appliances
and the percentage of
greenhouse
gasses produced by these
appliances
of
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in
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Australia. The largest
proprtion
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proportion
of
energy
is used by other
appliances
followed closely by water heating with heating and cooling by far the
one
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ones
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most responsible for producing
greenhouse
gas
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gases
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.
While
Heating and cooling
is
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are
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not the
one
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ones
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to consume the most
energy
, it has a significant amount of producing
greenhouse
gas at
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gases
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the
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number
of
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38%. The same applies to other
appliances
. It holds the most percentage of using up
energy
, but it holds the
thrid
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third
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palce
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place
to produce the most
greenhouse
gas
at 16%. Cooking, devices on
stand by
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, lighting, and refrigeration when taken altogether make up a third of the
overall
energy
used and almost a quarter of the
overall
producers of
greenhouse
gas
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, appliances, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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