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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented table demonstrates data about the percentage of students who attended four Secondary
School
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 Types in 3 various years( 2000, 2005,and 2009). It is obvious the best
school
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 that had a large number was
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school
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 in the initial years, but in the
last
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 year the
community
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school
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 was the best
one
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.
In addition
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, it is crucial that the figure of all institutes except
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schools
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 increased.
According to
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 the chart, the main
school
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 which people chose was Voluntary- controlled
schools
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, falling enormously trend, at the beginning had 52%;
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,
finally
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, reached 20%. The second
one
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 was Grammar
schools
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, which had 24% in 2000;
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,
this
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 motivation was the same as the first
one
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;
as a result
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, in 2009 the proportion of it was half of what in 2000. The graph illustrates the amount of Specialist
schools
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 was equal to the proportion of
community
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schools
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 at 12%.
community
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schools
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 had jump significant direction and hit 58 per cent in 2009;
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, another
one
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 went down slightly to 10% in 2009.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, community, one, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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