The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and maire comparisons where refevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and maire comparisons where refevant.
The two charts illustrate the changes in the ownership of electrical gadgets and the quantity
time
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of time
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spent on housework in a specific country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, as
percentage
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the percentage
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of
family
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families
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with electronics including washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, experiences an increase, number of time of housework per
week
decreases. It can be shown that two diagrams one related inversely. In
first
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the first
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40 years,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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significantly rose to 90% from having no user almost,
while
washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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gradually grew to 60% and 50% from 40% and 30%,
increased
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increasing
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by
same
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a same
the same
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number of
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apply
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percentage.
Furthermore
,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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climbed to
the
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apply
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around 75% in 2019, despite
the
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a
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slight fall of 5% between 1950 to 1980z For others,
vacuumed
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vacuuming
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and washing
machine
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machines
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remained rising to
last
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the last
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year of
this
period and, in 2019, most people had those devices for their home, in 2019, in
percentage
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the percentage
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of 100. In 1920, households spent about 50 hours per
week
on housework.
This
number steadily decreased over the years, dropping to around 20 hours per
week
by 1960 and continuing to decline to approximately 10 hours per
week
by 2019.
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