The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country.
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The chart below compares the number of films that were released and the number of tickets sold for
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this film
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between 1996 and 2006 in a state.
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, during these two different
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the percentage of cinema ticket sales for films related to comedy remained
23
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at 23
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% in 2006 and 20% in 1996. In the first
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it is seen that
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drama
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created on average 30%
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of films
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but ticket sales
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far less with 15%,
while
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fantasy and romance spent about as much as each other.
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, by 2006 sold less than was released. The gap in spending between these two graphs had widened and considerably more money was spent
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comedy than
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on others
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. As can be seen from the graph, the amount of money spent increased in all four statements in 2006 but rose the most dramatically in comedy,
as well as
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the period between 1996 and 2006 saw
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lowest index only in romance was lower than
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in 1996
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for
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3%.
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