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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table illustrates how many migrant employees worked in four various countries in 2003 and 2006 and
also
 the
number
 of these workers divided by 1000
people
 in Australia,New
Zealand
,the UK and the United States in 2006. It can be clearly seen that the highest
number
 of migrant workers was
for
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in
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 the US.
However
,
people
 did not prefer to move
New
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to New
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Zealand
 to
work
 which was the least
number
 of
immigrators
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immigration
immigrants
 over the period. In 2003,precisely 577000 employees migrated to the United States of America temporarily,compared to
people
 who moved to
this
 country in 2006 with 678000
people
.(Which was the highest
number
 of
immigrators
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immigrants
for
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apply
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working over the period).
Moreover
,the percentage of populations who prefer to
work
 in the US per 1000
people
 was just 2.3 in 2006.
In addition
,137000 of the communities tended to migrate to the UK temporarily in order to
work
 in 2003,as opposed to the
number
 of migrant employees in 2006 with 266000
people
.
In contrast
,the
number
 of
people
 who immigrated to New
Zealand
 to
work
 was 65000 in 2003.(Which was the least
number
 of
workes
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workers
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 over the whole year).Surprisingly,the
quantity
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number
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 of
people
 who went to New
Zealand
 was 21.1 per 1000
people
 in 2006.
Additionally
,219000
of
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apply
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migrant workers chose to move
in
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to
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 Australia in 2006,just ahead of
people
 who immigrated to
this
 country with 152000 in 2003.
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