The pie charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Oman and Spain in 2005 and projections for 2055. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Oman and Spain in 2005 and projections for 2055. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The two pie charts illustrate, the proportions of the different
age
categories of citizens from
Oman
and
Spain
in the Year 2005 and their predicted values after 5 decades from that
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,
while
Oman
had the lowest amount of people in
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the 15
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-59
arange
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range
Spain
had the lowest from
youngest
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the youngest
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group
moreover
it is clear that
in both countries adults are
most
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the most
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common
age
group
. A glance at the pie charts
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reveals
reveal
that in 2005, the two
age
categories of below 14
years
and above 60
years
were the same in
Oman
which accounted
48
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for 48
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% for each.
Similarly
, the lowest reported proportion of 4% was presented as
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a 15
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- 59 year range.
On the other hand
, when considering the Spanish population, about 14% of the total population
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the youngest
group
.
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,
the
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middle aged
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people were the
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most common
age
category in
Spain
, which is nearly twice as much
of
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the
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youngers
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younger
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and it is just
a
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apply
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half of the percentage of the same
age
in
Oman
.In the means of the eldest
group
, it
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a significant difference from
Oman
having 62%. When the forecasted values are considered, in
Oman
,the density of the elders
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expected to have
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increase
by
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5% than which was
in
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2005.
Although
the second eldest
group
will remain constant for 50
years
,
youngest
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the youngest
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range will be reduced by 11% during that period.
Finally
, in 2055
Spain
will reduce the
elder's
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concentration by 16% from its value 50
years
ago. Despite the doubling of the
amount
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of people from the
middle aged
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middle-aged
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category, kid's percentage will
be remained
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still in the same value as it
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was
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in 2005.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, oman, spain, group, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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