the graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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information regarding the transportation of products in the UK by four different means from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
, there was an upward trend observed in all the mentioned methods, with the most significant rise was seen in the number of goods delivered via roadways. In 1974, roadways carried the highest number of
good
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transported in the UK, recording approximately 70
million
tonnes
,as opposed to that of pipeline, with below 10
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million
tonnes
delivered. The number of products transported on boats (approximately 40%) and on trains (40%) was almost the same. Coming to 1994,
although
seeing some fluctuation, the figure for road transportation rose to above 80
million
tonnes
,
while
that of waterways increased significantly by around 20
million
tonnes
in 1990 and
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off there for 4 years.
Although
remained the lowest, pipeline
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a steady increase to reach 20
million
from 1974 to 2 decades later. After 1994, there was a slight drop in the data on cargo shipped on
road
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until around 1996,
where
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it reached a nadir of below 80
million
,
then
it rose again to almost 100 in 2002. The same pattern was experienced by both water transportation and railway, which reached above 60
million
and approximately 40
million
, respectively, in 2002.
Finally
, the figure for
pipeline
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reached the highest point of above 20
million
then
plateaued there until 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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