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the diagram below shows how a biofuel called is produced

the diagram below shows how a biofuel called is produced
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The chart shows how
ethanol
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 is made in some steps. It is clear from the graph that biofuel is made from
the
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plants
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 and
trees
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.
Overall
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,
ethanol
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 is made by
plants
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 or
trees
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 as a source of energy, after that, the
ethanol
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 becomes carbon dioxide and we can make from
that
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cars, trucks and planes. First of all, sunlight plus carbon dioxide made the green area grow.
Secondly
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, the big track collects the
trees
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 and
plants
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 (harvesting).
Third,
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the machines cut the
trees
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 and
plants
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 into tiny pieces , which is called pre-processing.
Then
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, cellulose and collected them to gather.
Moreover
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, it has become a liquid thing. Add to the liquid sugars and small and tiny things,
they
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called microbes.
Last
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 but not least, the
ethanol
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 is ready. The
ethanol
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 is used in many things,
such
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 as cars, trucks and planes.
Then
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 repeat the steps over and over.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, plants, trees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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