Some people think an international car free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution.Others think there are more effective ways do to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In recent years,
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pollution
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is
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increasing at an alarming rate.
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some feel that an international
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car free
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day
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could reduce
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air
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pollution
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, I,
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, agree with those who feel that other effective options can be used to reduce the polluted elements from
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air
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. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss both sides and share my viewpoints with relevant examples. On the one side, it could be argued that
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car free
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day
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can reduce
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carbon footprints drastically. Supporters of
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trend believe that preventing the usage of personal cars for a
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could reduce the toxic elements from the earth, resulting in breathable
air
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. Take Russia
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, where the government has reserved a
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for public transportation and
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usage
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of personal cars.
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trend has helped them in reducing their
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pollution
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by
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an unprecedented rate. On the other side, I firmly believe that
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carpooling for everyday travel can make the
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quality better.
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, if many people
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a
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for their daily commute, they could reduce the emission of toxic
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significantly.
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, I
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feel that the government can promote
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trend by giving rebates to those
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owners who do carpooling.
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, the Canadian government often give rebates to
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owners who travel with others. In conclusion,
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an international
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car free
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day
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can reduce the toxic
air
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from the atmosphere, carpooling could be an
alternate
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that can be used effectively.
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, on balance, I strongly believe that we shouldn't limit
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ourselves to
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the
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car free
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days to combat
against
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apply
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the
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air
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pollution
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.
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Try to provide more specific data or studies to support your claims about carpooling and international car free days.
coherence cohesion
Work on varying your sentence structure and avoid repetitive phrases such as 'toxic elements'.
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You have effectively addressed both perspectives of the argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a strong introduction and conclusion that frame your arguments well.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, making your essay more convincing.
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