In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The practice when governments restrain salaries is well known.
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result
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result,
people
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polarazed
on supporters and opponents of the phenomenon. Correct your spelling
polarized
This
essay will explore both Linking Words
view
and I will give my personal opinion Change to a plural noun
views
why
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on why
such
regulation should not be implemented.
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To begin
with, Linking Words
the
social cohesion as the positive factor of a Correct article usage
apply
hight
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high
salaries
limitation will be considered. Fix the agreement mistake
salary
For instance
, in Finland, the place where my classmate Linking Words
live
, the gap between rich citizens and individuals with Change the verb form
lives
avarage
income is pretty minute. So, many Correct your spelling
average
people
in the country feel equality and justice. Alternatively, the situation in Egipt, where extremely wealthy Use synonyms
housholds
lived in one Correct your spelling
households
areas
with poor ones before crowds of Change to a singular noun
area
people
swiped the government with rich Use synonyms
people
out, destroying half of the country.
The escaping of Use synonyms
exeptional
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exceptional
talants
to other countries is the negative side of Correct your spelling
talents
talent
wages
constrain. Fix the agreement mistake
wage
This
is because, for many Linking Words
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people
the main motivation is Add a comma
people,
the
income and professionals may move to a country where the salary is higher. To illustrate Correct article usage
apply
this
, we can look at FranceLinking Words
,
when the authorities had increased taxes for top managers, Remove the comma
apply
thousands
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thousands of
people
changed their residentship. Use synonyms
As a result
, the lack of professionals and the economic slowdown. Linking Words
In addition
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absence
of the desire to move forward in Correct article usage
the absence
career
ladder is the second reason against making upper frames for money that employees can earn. Correct article usage
the career
In other words
, workers may not want to rise in a company because Linking Words
the
salary will not increase. Change the word
their
Such
experience Linking Words
exist
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existed
Soviet
Union, when engineers earned the same Correct article usage
the Soviet
financies
as workers did and representatives of Correct your spelling
finances
financiers
low ranked
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low-ranked
stuff
did not want to grow.
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staff
To conclude
, the law of not allowing salaries to be higher than a certain level has many cases of most Linking Words
talanted
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talented
people
lost and the lack of motivation to rise in a job position. I consider that Use synonyms
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this
drawbacks of Correct determiner usage
the
such
practice Linking Words
outweight
the risk of growing an envy Correct your spelling
outweigh
to
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of
richest
.Correct article usage
the richest
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