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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart below
provides
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data on crime in the UK during the
last
 year.
Overall
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the
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criminal conversations in the
uk
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UK
.
According to
 what can be shown recently
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the
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males
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male
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 increased rate
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for
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the
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criminal conversations in the
uk
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 on the one
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hands
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,
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the
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male
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about
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during
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 20 to 25 do
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had
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 more criminal convictions think that
this
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younger
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 and
need
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 more observation the percentage
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very large majority.
duing
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during
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hands
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,it is interesting to
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 figures during the 20 age increased marked
gradual
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do
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criminal conversations by approximately more
then
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percentage
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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