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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts represent data regarding global
water
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use
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 distribution, and
water
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 usage in two different
country
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countries
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.
Overall
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,
while
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 the greatest share of global
water
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consumption
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 was attributed to agricultural purposes,
water
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consumption
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 per person in Brazil owning a vast irrigated land is far higher than in the democratic republic of
Congo
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. To commence with,
although
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 all three types of
consumption
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 increased over
given
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 time, the agriculture portion with some 500 km3 in 1900 rocketed to over 3000 km3 in 2000.
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, though industrial and domestic
use
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 started at approximately the same level just around 50 in 1900, industrial
use
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 surpassed the domestic category and reached About 1200 km3 in 2000,
while
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 in the
last
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 observed year, domestic
use
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 never reached the initial given years of agricultural level.
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, Brazil with 26500 irrigated land and 359 m3 of
water
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consumption
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 per person was over 80 times higher usage figure than
Congo
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,
whereas
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Congo
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 owned only 100km of Land.
additionally
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,
Congo
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's population was around a thirtieth of Brazil's population.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, consumption, congo, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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