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The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The 4 diverse pie charts compare data about the percentage of
men
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 and women who are working in 3 various items in 2 Differents countries( A and
B
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).
Overall
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, most of the
people
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 who are employed in A and
B
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 regions work for Services, but the number of
people
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 having a job in
this
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 section in
country
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B
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 is more than in
country
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 A.
According to
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 the Male plot, most of the
people
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 had service occupations because the figure of
men
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 who worked in
this
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 thing for district
B
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 is 65% and A area had 11% less than
B
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. The second section which
people
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 like is
agriculture
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 29% in
country
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 A, but In
country
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B
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industry
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 32% is the second
one
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. The
last
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one
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 was
Industry
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 in A
country
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 where the figure is half of
secondly
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;
moreover
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,
Agriculture
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 with 3% is not a popular career. The female diagrams show the important work in both countries are Services that in
country
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 A has 49% and in
country
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B
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 has 24% more than
men
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.
Agriculture
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, which is the second thing in A region, has a 14% increase from
men
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.
In addition
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, for
country
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B
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 the proportion of
industry
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 21% reduced from males. The third
one
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 for A is
Industry
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, which is the same as the first
one
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, has 8%;
furthermore
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, 1% of
Country
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B
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 female inhabitants prefer to do
Agriculture
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, b, people, country, agriculture, industry, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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