The diagrams below show the process of making chocolate. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the process of making chocolate.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures illustrate how to turn chocolate pods into liquid chocolate that can be consumed.
Overall
, there are six steps that are conducted outside the
mill
and four steps that are conducted inside the
mill
.
Firstly
, it begins with the processes outside the
mill
which started by picking the ripe red pods from the cacao trees that grow in South America, Africa and Indonesia.
The next step is
the pods were harvested and the white cocoa
beans
inside were taken.
Then
, the
beans
are fermented and spread in the sun to dry. After that, the dried
beans
were put into the large sacks and were transported to the factory by train or lorry. The next processes were conducted inside the
mill
.
Following
this
, the dried
beans
were roasted in the oven at a temperature of around 350 degrees Celcius.
Next,
the roasted cacao
beans
were crushed by the machine and the outer shell was removed. The
last
, the inner part of the
beans
was pressed by the machine and the liquid chocolate was produced.
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