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Many believe that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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I believe that increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 is a
way
 to solve some
environemental
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environmental
problems
, but not the best
way
 to solve all the environmental
problems
. Environmental
problems
 include air pollution,
lost
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loss
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 of natural
habit
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habitat
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 for wildlife animals, water pollution, limited space of landfills, and others. These environmental
problems
 could cause decreasing
of
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in
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 biodiversity, worsening the problem of global warming, and reducing the speed of restoring natural resources. Extreme weather
such
 as floodings, droughts or typhoons
then
 occur more
frequent
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frequently
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, destroy more
artifacts
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artefacts
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,
cause
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and cause
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 more injuries and deaths. Increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 may be a solution
of
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to
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 preventing natural
habitat
lost
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loss
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.
Fuel
 is a kind of fossil
fuel
 which can only be found underground.
Surface
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 of the land like trees
have
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 to be removed for harvesting the
fuel
, which causes the
lost
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loss
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 of
habitat
 for wildlife animals,
also
 the original
habitat
 is difficult to
be restored
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restore
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.
According to
 economic theories, increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 can reduce the amount of
fuel
 used, so as to reduce the frequency of destroying
the
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apply
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nature for underground
fuel
.
However
, adding the
fuel
price
 may only decrease the amount of
fuel
 used in
short
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the short
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 term. Since hot waves occur frequently, demand for air-conditioners
increases
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 rapidly in recent years.
Price
 control may not be able to decrease the usage of fuels significantly.
Instead
, increasing the amount of generating renewable resources,
such
 as solar energy, wind energy, etc., can be a
way
 to reduce the natural
habitat
lost
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loss
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. When more renewable resources are generated, lower
fuel
 is needed,
therefore
, the need for harvesting fossil fuels is reduced. The speed of losing natural
haitat
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habitat
habitats
 can be lowered.
To sum up
, increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 may be a solution for lowering the speed of natural
habitat
lost
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loss
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,
whereas
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but
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 it is not the best nor only
way
 to solve the environmental problem.
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