In my place, a new home are needed, but only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build a new home there. What is your opinion?

Accoding
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According
to my
knowledge
, I do agree
to build
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with building
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home
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a home
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in
countryside
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the countryside
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. I am living in
Correct article usage
a surburb
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surburb
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suburb
, but I feel like
air
pollution
is serious.
Oh
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Oh,
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countryside
is a good
place
but not much
space
to be taken is fine for me.
Accoding
Correct your spelling
According
to my
knowledge
, I do agree
to build
Change preposition
with building
show examples
home
Add an article
a home
show examples
in
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
show examples
. I am living in
Correct article usage
a surburb
show examples
surburb
Correct your spelling
suburb
, but I feel like
air
pollution
is serious.
Oh
Add the punctuation
Oh,
show examples
countryside
is a good
place
but not much
space
to be taken is fine for me.
Accoding
Correct your spelling
According
to my
knowledge
, I do agree
to build
Change preposition
with building
show examples
home
Add an article
a home
show examples
in
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
show examples
. I am living in
Correct article usage
a surburb
show examples
surburb
Correct your spelling
suburb
, but I feel like
air
pollution
is serious.
Oh
Add the punctuation
Oh,
show examples
countryside
is a good
place
but not much
space
to be taken is fine for me.
Accoding
Correct your spelling
According
to my
knowledge
, I do agree
to build
Change preposition
with building
show examples
home
Add an article
a home
show examples
in
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
show examples
. I am living in
Correct article usage
a surburb
show examples
surburb
Correct your spelling
suburb
, but I feel like
air
pollution
is serious.
Oh
Add the punctuation
Oh,
show examples
countryside
is a good
place
but not much
space
to be taken is fine for me.
Accoding
Correct your spelling
According
to my
knowledge
, I do agree
to build
Change preposition
with building
show examples
home
Add an article
a home
show examples
in
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
show examples
. I am living in
Correct article usage
a surburb
show examples
surburb
Correct your spelling
suburb
, but I feel like
air
pollution
is serious.
Oh
Add the punctuation
Oh,
show examples
countryside
is a good
place
but not much
space
to be taken is fine for me.
Accoding
Correct your spelling
According
to my
knowledge
, I do agree
to build
Change preposition
with building
show examples
home
Add an article
a home
show examples
in
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
show examples
. I am living in
Correct article usage
a surburb
show examples
surburb
Correct your spelling
suburb
, but I feel like
air
pollution
is serious.
Oh
Add the punctuation
Oh,
show examples
countryside
is a good
place
but not much
space
to be taken is fine for me.
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Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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Avoid repetition. Make sure each point is unique and supports your main argument.
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Provide specific examples and reasons to support your opinion. This adds depth to your response and demonstrates your understanding.
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Clearly state your position and develop your argument in a logical sequence. This will help improve the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is a good starting point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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