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The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given chart illustrates the number of international attendances at
universities
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 in a
European
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 nation. It can be seen that
China
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 and America both hold the most significant figures.
Moreover
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, the tiniest statistic belonged to
Russia
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. In 2004, there were around 27000 Chinese students who applied to
universities
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 in a
European
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 country
while
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 the figure for Russian was 2500. Plus, there were roughly 13000
applicants
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 from the USA which is 6000 bigger than it is from
Japan
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. In the next year,
applicants
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 from
China
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 decreased to 23000 which is 8000 higher than those from the US. Meanwhile, the figure for
Russia
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 was 2000 and
Japan
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 remained stable.in 2006, there was equality in participation in
universities
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 of one
European
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 nation from
China
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 and the USA (around 17000). There were 2500 Russian students who attended
universities
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 which is 4500 less than
Japan
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. In the next year, a
European
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 nation witnessed 23000
applicants
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 from the US to the
universities
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 which is 4000 huger than
China
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while
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 participants for
Russia
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 were around 2000.
Additionally
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, there were nearly 10000 Japanese students who went to
universities
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 in one
European
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 area. In the year after, the number of
applicants
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 from the US was 27000 which is one of the highest figures in the chart
while
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 statistics for
China
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 were slightly higher than 15000.
In addition
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, there were 2700 attendances from
Russia
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 which is 7300 smaller than
Japan
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words universities, european, china, russia, applicants, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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