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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. m

The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. m
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gives
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 the percentages of harmful waste management methods in
three
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the three
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 countries shown.
It is clear that
,
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apply
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undergrounding
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the undergrounding
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way
 is
popular
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a popular
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 method in these countries.
However
, in the Republic of Korea recycling
the
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 most popular, meanwhile The UK does not use
this
 method but in comparison with other countries, it has other ways
such
 as chemical treatment and dumping at sea.Turning to the details, In
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea the main part or to be more precise 69
percent
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per cent
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 of waste passes through recycling
,
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 after that comes
the
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undergrounding
way
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was
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 22% and the
last
 one - incineration, with 9%. The situation is
simiar
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similar
 for Sweden, where of the country's 55% is undergrounding,25% is recycling and 20% of waste passes with incineration
way
.
According to
 the pie chart, in The UK incineration took the
last
 top with only 2%,
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Although
Altough
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although
, the undergrounding
way
 has 82
percent
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, and other mentioned methods are 8%
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