The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about
percentage
of education levels of both 6 different Add an article
the percentage
countries
and genders and their predictions in the Use synonyms
last
year.
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Overall
South Linking Words
Asia
, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa had the highest rates of illiteracy , Use synonyms
while
developed Linking Words
countries
and Latin American Caribbean was the Use synonyms
at
least person in terms of education .
At first Change preposition
apply
glance
we can say that Add a comma
glance,
the
female people Correct article usage
apply
had
more illiterate person than Verb problem
are
males
in all Use synonyms
countries
. Use synonyms
For example
, ın Linking Words
the
South Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
Asia
the percentage of uneducated Add a comma
Asia,
males
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were
around %55 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
whereas
the Linking Words
males
were just above %33.
The other similar Use synonyms
countries
which are Use synonyms
Arab
States and Correct article usage
the Arab
Sub Saharan
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Sub-Saharan
Africa's
people have had 1/2 figures of Change noun form
Africa
Correct article usage
the male's
male's
illiteracy ratio respectively slightly under %30 and slightly under %30. Change noun form
male
On
the other developed Change preposition
In
countries
, Latin American Caribbean and East Use synonyms
Asia
Oceania had the smallest illiterate percentage for both genders compared to other Use synonyms
countries
because they contained utmost %30 Use synonyms
males
and females ,Use synonyms
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furthermore
when it comes to developed Add a comma
furthermore,
countries
, they had approximately %3 illiteracy rates .
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As a result
, we can deduce that developed Linking Words
countries
, Latin America Caribbean and East Use synonyms
Asia
Oceania have more numbers of people who Use synonyms
are have
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have
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a bachelor degree
bachelor degrees
bachelor
degrees as opposed to Change noun form
bachelor's
other
three Correct article usage
the other
countries
must increase Use synonyms
education
of their residents.Correct article usage
the education
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