You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about
percentage
of education levels of both 6 different Add an article
the percentage
countries
and genders and their predictions in the last
year.
Overall
South Asia
, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa had the highest rates of illiteracy , while
developed countries
and Latin American Caribbean was the at
least person in terms of education .
At first Change preposition
apply
glance
we can say that Add a comma
glance,
the
female people Correct article usage
apply
had
more illiterate person than Verb problem
are
males
in all countries
. For example
, ın the
South Correct article usage
apply
Asia
the percentage of uneducated Add a comma
Asia,
males
were
around %55 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
whereas
the males
were just above %33.
The other similar countries
which are Arab
States and Correct article usage
the Arab
Sub Saharan
Add a hyphen
Sub-Saharan
Africa's
people have had 1/2 figures of Change noun form
Africa
Correct article usage
the male's
male's
illiteracy ratio respectively slightly under %30 and slightly under %30. Change noun form
male
On
the other developed Change preposition
In
countries
, Latin American Caribbean and East Asia
Oceania had the smallest illiterate percentage for both genders compared to other countries
because they contained utmost %30 males
and females ,furthermore
when it comes to developed Add a comma
furthermore,
countries
, they had approximately %3 illiteracy rates .
As a result
, we can deduce that developed countries
, Latin America Caribbean and East Asia
Oceania have more numbers of people who are have
Change the verb form
have
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a bachelor degree
bachelor degrees
bachelor
degrees as opposed to Change noun form
bachelor's
other
three Correct article usage
the other
countries
must increase education
of their residents.Correct article usage
the education
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, asia, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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