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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the changes in cutting tools that ancient people used for everyday life and tasks during the Stone Age (1.4 and 0.8 million
years
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 ago). Overview, it can be seen that the
side
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view
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 of the tools had become
more
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narrow and ancient people started to use two sides
instead
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 of one for cutting after 600 thousand
years
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. Analyzing the given diagram, it can be noticed that the front
view
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 of
tool
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 A is sharp on one
side
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 and it had a triangular form 1.4 million
years
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 ago. The
side
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view
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 of
this
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tool
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 was thick and the back
view
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 had a small place for a finger to hold. After 600 thousand
years
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, ancient people started to use a new
tool
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 B for cutting. It had an oval form and two sharp sides. The
side
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view
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 of the new
tool
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 was narrower than the previous
tool
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 and the back
view
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 had a more comfortable place for holding in the center of the stone.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, side, view, tool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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