The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line
graph
demonstrates the expenditure of meat and
fish
in a European country from 1979 to 2004. As shown from the
graph
, European countries' consumings of
meats
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meat
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and
fish
was unstable and had fluctuations from
highest
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the highest
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point
to
lowest
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the lowest
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.
Chicken
and
beef
had the
most
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highest
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rate,
however
,
lamb
and
fish
always were in the lowest degree.
Firstly
,
chicken
and
lamb
started from above 150 grams and 90 grams
with
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opposite directions from each other.
Chicken
started to
increase
while
lamb
struggled until 1984.
Chicken
and
lamb
had
steady
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a steady
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increase
in 1989, but in 1994
lamb
faced with decrease
while
chicken
consumption boomed.
Chicken
's expenditure continued to grow,
in
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on
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other
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the other
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hand,
lamb
faced with gradual decrease in 1999.
Finally
, in 2004, both of them had little
increase
.
Secondly
,
beef
and
fish
are opposite to each other.
Beef
started from the highest
point
in the
graph
.
In contrast
,
fish
started from the lowest
point
in the
graph
.
Fish
consumings was
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consumption
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fluctuated in its initial
point
from start to
its
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apply
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end.
Beef
consumption had
steady
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a steady
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increase
in 1984.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, fish, point, chicken, beef, lamb, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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