The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line
graph
demonstrates the expenditure of meat and fish
in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
As shown from the graph
, European countries' consumings of meats
and Fix the agreement mistake
meat
fish
was unstable and had fluctuations from highest
Add an article
the highest
point
to lowest
. Correct article usage
the lowest
Chicken
and beef
had the most
rate, Correct word choice
highest
however
, lamb
and fish
always were in the lowest degree.
Firstly
, chicken
and lamb
started from above 150 grams and 90 grams with
opposite directions from each other. Change preposition
in
Chicken
started to increase
while
lamb
struggled until 1984. Chicken
and lamb
had steady
Add an article
a steady
increase
in 1989, but in 1994 lamb
faced with decrease while
chicken
consumption boomed. Chicken
's expenditure continued to grow, in
Change preposition
on
other
hand, Correct article usage
the other
lamb
faced with gradual decrease in 1999. Finally
, in 2004, both of them had little increase
.
Secondly
, beef
and fish
are opposite to each other. Beef
started from the highest point
in the graph
. In contrast
, fish
started from the lowest point
in the graph
. Fish
consumings was
fluctuated in its initial Verb problem
consumption
point
from start to its
end. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Beef
consumption had steady
Add an article
a steady
increase
in 1984.Submitted by zerdeteacher2024 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, fish, point, chicken, beef, lamb, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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