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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in the European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in the European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The provided line graph illustrates the
consumption
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 of
meat
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 and sea products in selected European
country
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 between 1979 and 2004.
Overall
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, all
meat
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 types
such
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 as beef, lamb, and fish faced a significant decline, except the
chicken
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 products which showed an upward trend. The indicators are noted in grams per
person
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 per
week
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. Beef
consumption
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 experienced a fluctuating but
overall
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 declining trend.
Initially
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 the most consumed
meat
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 at about 220
g
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 per
person
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 per
week
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,
it’s
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consumption
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 dropped sharply around the mid
of
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1980s, with a notable decline in the late 1980s and early 1990s. By 2004, beef
consumption
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 had fallen to around 100
g
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. Fish
consumption
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 remained relatively stable throughout the period with a slight decrease to 50
g
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 in 2004
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 From 1979 to 2004 ,
chicken
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consumption
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increase
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 significantly. It started at about 150
g
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 in 1979 and rose steadily, surpassing all other types of
meat
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 by the early 1990s. By 2004,
chicken
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consumption
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 had reached approximately 250
g
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. Starting at about 150
g
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, on the same level as
chicken
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consumption
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, lamb
consumption
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 declined steadily over the 25-year period. it fell to almost 60
g
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 by 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, meat, chicken, person, week, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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