The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions were relevant.
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The table illustrates 18.000 more people
amount
of Add an article
the amount
visitors
to Ashdown Museum before and after restoration
. Pie charts demostrate
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demonstrate
questionnaire
of visitor satisfaction.
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a questionnaire
Overall
, number
of Change the article
the number
visitors
to Ashdown Musemum
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Museum
are
increased after the refurbishment.
The amount of Unnecessary verb
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visitors
before the restoration
was 74.000. After the refurbishment, the number of visitors
was increased 92.000. The table showsCorrect word choice
that
visit
the museum after the Wrong verb form
visited
restoration
.
According
the pie charts, people who very satisfied Add the preposition
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their
visit was increased Change preposition
with their
15
% Change preposition
from 15
percentage
to 35%. In addition
, satisfied visitors
was
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30
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from 30
percentage
. Opposite
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amazing
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an amazing
visitors
who Change preposition
in visitors
dissatisfied
. After the Add a missing verb
were dissatisfied
restoration
, the percentage
of dissatisfied individuals was decline
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declined
40
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from 40
this
, very
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the very
visitors
percentage
was decrease
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decreased
to
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from
percentage
to 5%. However
, people who did not answer the survey was remained
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