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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart depicts the
production
 of milk yearly in four different countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
Overall
,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 became
a
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the
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 state that
have
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has
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a
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the
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 highest milk
production
 and Guatemala was the least
rank
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ranked
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 among others.
To begin
 with, in 1990,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had
total
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a total
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production
with
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of
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 11.262.000
litres
 and decreased in 2000. But, successfully rose again in 2010. Another country, in 1990, Australia
has
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was
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 nearly
starting
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the starting
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 point with
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, which was 11.246.000
litres
.
Then
, steadily down to 11.105.000
litres
. In 2010, significantly plunged
until
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to
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 9.165.000
litres
. On the other sides, Tanzania in 1990 had amount
production
about
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of about
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 87
thousands
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thousand
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litres
. From time to time,
this
 country constantly increased in 2000 and 2010, respectively 142.000
litres
 and 155.000
litres
.
Last
 state, in 1990, Guatemala produced milk approximately 26
thousands
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thousand
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litres
. The good thing is the country showed big changes.
In other words
, the total
production
 in 2000 and 2010 can generate more than two times
than
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that
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 before
production
.
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