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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year .

#plans #show #site #airport #redevelopment #year
The planes
illustrates
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 the layout of an airport now and how it will look in
future
 after reconstruction.
Overall
 , it can be seen that the airport will become modern including more gates , sky train and ATM
machine
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machines
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.
To begin
 with , now there are eight gates in the airport for
walkway
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,yet in
future
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the future
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 gates will increase to 18 . In the departures sector , there is a cafe and check-in cabin but in
future
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 there
would
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 be a
portion
for
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where people will drop their bags.
Moreover
 , next to the departures
zone
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 there is
a
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 area where security and passport control are established and
also
 remain in
future
 .
Furthermore
 , the arrivals
portion
 is empty now , but in the next year , there will be a cafe and an ATM machine . Next to the arrivals
portion
, there will be a room
of
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 customs.
Additionally
, there will be some shops next to the departures
portion
 .
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Introduction
Ensure that your introduction clearly states what the plans show and avoid unnecessary repetition. For example, simplify the first sentence for clarity.
Grammar
There are minor grammatical errors such as 'planes' instead of 'plans,' and missing articles 'a' or 'the' before nouns. Make sure to proofread your work to minimize these errors.
Sentence Structure
Some sentences are a bit fragmented and could benefit from conjunctions to connect ideas more smoothly. For example, 'It can be seen that the airport will become modern, including more gates, a sky train, and ATM machines.'
Details
Elaborate on the key differences with specific detail or examples. For instance, mention the exact number of gates increasing from 8 to 18 and the new presence of a sky train.
Conclusion
Your conclusion could reiterate the significance of the redevelopment, summarizing the major changes rather than introducing new points.
Clarity
The description highlights key features and changes that are easy to follow and understand, making it clear what transformations are planned for the airport.
Comparison
There is a good attempt to differentiate between the current layout and the future layout, which helps to clearly show the changes that will occur.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • terminal
  • car park
  • runways
  • redevelopment
  • proposed changes
  • expanded terminals
  • new gates
  • additional parking
  • amenities
  • navigation
  • environmental impact
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • traffic congestion
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