It costs a lot of money for a country to host an international sports event, such as the Olympic Games and Football World Cup. Some people think that this is a waste of money, but others believe the opposite. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Throughout
the world there are harsh debates going on among the people about hosting huge
sport event
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can be
costly
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a costly
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and
unsufficient
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insufficient
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spend of
money
for their
conturies
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countries
budget,
while
other
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others
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, including me , believe that
in
contrast
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this
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these
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surcumstances
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circumstances
circumstance
might be beneficial for the host governments economy. On the one hand, establishing
such
a famous
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a famous sport competition
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sport
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competitions may cause
great
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a great
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amount of additional
spendings
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spending
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from the
countury
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country
that
hostes
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hosts
all of these events. In order to match
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requirments
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requirements
of
such
sport
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events
government
should mark
significant
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amount of
money
for the needed details
such
stadiums
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as stadiums
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for
canduct
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conduct
the competitions and many hotel facilities for both athletics and fan.
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the year
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of
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2024
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2024,
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Paris will be hosting for next Olympic games. There are
many
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news
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about
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the eccessive
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eccessive
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excessive
spenditure
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expenditure
of France
government
for
this
compitition
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competition
. Many of the residents started directly showing disagreement
for
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this
decision.
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,
due to
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the floging
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floging
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flogging
fledging
crowd
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crowds
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to
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watching the Olympic Games and Football
world
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World
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Cup hosting can make a lot of
money
sipmly
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simply
serving the guests. Fans who
came
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to watch matches and competitions always bring with
themselves
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them
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money
for their daily and special needs. All
chain
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chains
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of services will gain
huge
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a huge
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profit
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profits
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from guests
this
will provide local
resigents
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residents
addtional
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additional
job vacancies and
salary
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salaries
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.
Government
can replace its
spenditure
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expenditure
with huge financial
gain
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gains
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by simply gathering taxes from local
bussinesses
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businesses
.
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, Brazil made two times more
money
against its
spenditure
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expenditure
in
Football
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the Football
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world
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Cup 2018
while
hosting
this
event.
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, despite
fact
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the fact
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that it might seem like wasting
money
from
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the
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host
government
to
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on
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famous
sport
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sports
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events ,
actually
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actually,
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it is
perfect
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a perfect
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occorance
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occasion
for making a lot of
money
for the
the
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country.
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task achievement
You provide balanced arguments with relevant examples regarding both views on the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introductory and concluding paragraphs effectively frame your essay.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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