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With the rise in popularity of the Internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the rise in popularity of the Internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past The
world wide web
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 is becoming the most popular
sources
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 of reading
a news
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news
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, and in
future
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future,
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 the
internet
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 might replace newspapers as a more modern source of information.
This
 essay will explain why the internet is
more
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a more
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confortable
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comfortable
 way of checking news, and how they are able to replace magazines. First of all, I strongly agree with
this
 statement. Because
cheking
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checking
 news from
phone
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the phone
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 is more comfortable.
Moreover
, by analyzing the usage of publisher's sites it can be seen that
,
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 it is easier to open your phone, rather than go to the shop and buy a magazine.
For instance
, every popular publisher ("The Sun", "The Guardian")
have
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 a great amount of readers outside of
journal's
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the journal's
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 origin country and should create sites for their clients
Therefore
, big media groups are following the most effective way to increase
number
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 of readers. Second of all, in the
last
 decade documents were more likely converted to electronic
version
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versions
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. Nowadays, people prefer to convert
information
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the information
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 in digital form
due to
 its flexibility in usage
substenquently
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subsequently
.
This
 preference showed that society is going to be more adaptive to new technologies, and change of main
procees
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process
processes
 of
consumpting
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consumption
infformation
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information
.
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