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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books beacause they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #beacause
In the near
future
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people
 are not going to buy printed things like newspapers and
books
 because everything will be online and free.Well,there are some
people
 who are for
this
statment
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statement
 and others who are
against
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against it
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. On the one
people
 who are for
this
statment
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statement
 have their own reasons .
For example
, they say that the world is improving and the printed newspapers and
books
 are going to be old and replace it with
a
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 improved copy is better because it's easier to read and to faster.Another example is that
,
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 they think that reading online is better for saving money because it's free for everyone and you don't have to pay money to read anything.
On the other hand
,
people
 who are against have their own reasons.First of all, they believe that online reading can harm
the
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companies in many ways and that will lead to the end of
books
 and
newspapers
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 publishing because they will get no profit from it.
Moreover
,they reckon that E-reading is going to harm you as it can affect the vision. To
coclude
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conclude
 we can say that, reading
books
in general
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 is useful and good it's
agood
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a good
good
 source to improve
you
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 self.
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,
it
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I
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totaly
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totally
agree
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 with the idea
of
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that
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 reading E-
books
 is better because it's easier , faster ,
more
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and more
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 comfortable to read and
no
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not
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 forget that
it's
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 saves money.
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