A young person will start work at your office next month to gain work experience. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter ▪️Inform him/her about the work that needs to be done at the office; ▪️Explain what he/she is supposed to do on the first day; ▪️Suggest what he/she should bring to work

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Hello, Tim, I hope you are doing well. I wanted to discuss with you
about
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some points of your work you are expected to start next
months
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. First of all, and it's the
paramaunt
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paramount
point, you have to wear
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a suits
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suits
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and
tie
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. We
are prefer
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the classic style.
Secondly
, we will get you
laptop
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and
flashdrive
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flash drive
, you can't use your own in accordance with safety requirements.
Thirdly
, you have to be at your workplace at 8 a.m., late for more than 5
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without
announsement wil
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an announcement will
cost you a premium. You have an opportunity to take 12 days of illnesses annually, but it's not for your
children
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illnesses. We have
some
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deal with the restaurant
in
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the first floor of our building, you can eat there for 15$ daily, if you will
spent
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more - we will take it from your wage. On the first
day
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you will start your
looking
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with John, one of our
manager
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, he will be responsible for you, you can ask him all the questions you have, but really you can talk to all of us. See you. Best regards. Anastassia
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logical structure
To improve logical structure, try to use clear transitions between points. This helps guide the reader through your letter smoothly.
suitable writing tone
Ensure that your letter is addressed more formally and professionally. For instance, instead of 'See you,' you could say 'I look forward to welcoming you on your first day.'
complete response
You have covered all three points effectively: informing about the work, explaining the first day, and suggesting what to bring.
single idea per paragraph
The structure of your letter is clear, with distinct paragraphs for each point which enhances readability.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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