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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Graph: Average UK salaries, by city.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Graph: Average UK salaries, by city.
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The graphic represents the mean wages of 7 cities in
UK
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the UK
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 .
overall
 ,the chart represents the number of
samples
 per city and the average salaries in that city . There is a difference of around 8000 pounds between the highest and
lowest paid
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lowest-paid
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 cities . The number of
samples
 in the
top paid
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top-paid
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 city is more than 10 times of others London , England has the highest pay of 33,634 from 50951
samples
 .
whereas
 Cambridge England is
at
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in
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the
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apply
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second place with 29,854 pounds , the number of
samples
 there is the least at 2180 . Bristol
as well as
 Edinburgh has almost similar wages . Manchester and Glasgow share almost at par salaries with Glasgow being slightly more . Birmingham has
more
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a larger
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 sample size than Edinburgh and Cambridge but the wages
is
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are
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 at the lowest among the 7 cities at 25,531 pounds only . The sample size though 2949
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