The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts provide information about the percentages of
adults
using different devices to watch TV in Canada in the years 2009 and 2019.
Overall
, at the beginning of the
period
, the
rate
of
adults
watching TV on conventional televisions was the highest,
while
tablets had the lowest
rate
.
By contrast
,
at the end
of the
period
, the
rate
of
adults
watching TV on conventional televisions dropped dramatically and became the lowest,
whereas
flat-screen
TVs
and mobile phones became the most used devices. In 2009, the
rate
of
adults
watching
on
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conventional
TVs
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was 34%, which
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the lowest
rate
of 4% by the end of the
period
.
However
, at the beginning of the
period
, the rates of
adults
watching on laptops and desktop computers were 20% and 18%, respectively. By 2019, the
percentages
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of
adults
watching on laptops and desktop computers decreased slightly to 12% each. The
rate
of people watching on tablets was the lowest at 5% in 2009 but became the third
most used
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device by the end of the
period
. In 2009, the rates of
adults
watching on mobile phones and flat-screen
TVs
were 15% and 8%, respectively. By 2019, the rates of
adults
watching on mobile phones and flat-screen
TVs
were the highest at around 27% each.
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